Read my Batman story for me?

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  • #508246
    phantomess
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    I’m looking for any volunteers to read my Batman story. It’s 75 word document pages. All feedback welcome!
    I’d appreciate if you would tell me any of the following:
    -What you like and/or don’t like about the story
    -If you have any suggestions for improving some parts or aspects of the story
    -If you notice any grammar or spelling mistakes
    -If you begin reading it and dislike it so much you don’t want to finish (I can take it!)
    -If you have any title suggestions (My favorite title idea already exists in Batman comics. My only other title idea is not as great.)

    I only want honest input. I may or may not go make changes to the story for all suggestions, but every piece of feedback would be appreciated since it can help me learn and grow as a writer.

    If you’re willing to do me this favor, please let me know and I’ll e-mail it to you as an attachment.

    Oh, and no, you don’t have to have Batman knowledge.

    Formerly had the Batman & Joker avatar!

    #935467
    Bodine
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    I will!I will send you my email addy.
    I think,as an input,if you aren’t quite happy with the title,keep thinking on it. 😉

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    #935485
    phantomess
    Participant

    Yeah, still thinking on the title. I’m open to discussing my thoughts on that with anyone after they read it.
    E-mailed it to you! Thanks!
    🙂

    Formerly had the Batman & Joker avatar!

    #935532
    Kim
    Participant

    You could e-mail it to me too. I will message with my e-mail.

    Looking for rainbow or pink & teal grab bags!

    #935942
    phantomess
    Participant

    Thank you to the couple of people who have messaged me with offers to read it, by the way. I will still e-mail it to anyone else who’d like to offer. The more opinions and suggestions, the better! 🙂
    Oh, and it has been pointed out to me that I needn’t have capitalized “Sir” whenever Alfred is addressing Bruce. I will be going through and fixing those eventually.

    Formerly had the Batman & Joker avatar!

    #937498
    phantomess
    Participant

    I wanted to edit my first post in here and the thread title, but it won’t seem to let me for some reason. Figured I’d just post my update here.

    I believe I finished tweaking things with the story and it’s now available to read at fanfiction.net. I still have to post the last few chapters but I’ll have them up soon. They’re done but I guess I just tend to take my time with things, haha.

    Link to story-
    https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11629584/1/Batman-Arkham-Sonata

    But mainly, I wanted to share the cover I made for it when I printed it out. The cover was kind of a lot of work for me since I’m really not much of an artist.

    Formerly had the Batman & Joker avatar!

    #937500

    The picture tells the story! Good job! And good story!! Thanks for letting me read it early on!

    #937514
    phantomess
    Participant

    You’re welcome of course, and thanks so much! 🙂

    Formerly had the Batman & Joker avatar!

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