Well, this is almost end of this “book” – “The Veligent”( maybe there will be one last page after this one, like a back inside cover), but it’s not the end of the bigger story, “Reptangle”.
Graphic novels usually come in “trades”. These are booklets ( often made up of individual comic books) that go together with other trades in a series to make up a larger narrative. I hope to publish ” The Veligent ” as a “trade”.
(Yeah, I know you guys might all be going “duh!”, but I didn’t have clue what a trade was when I first started doing this!)
Anyway, so now what?
I could start posting the prequel… I drew most of that about 18 years ago, so the style is a little different. It is the story of Serence, Kade and their siblings growing up. It’s in black and white.
I could color it to match.
I don’t think I can manage to continue this story from the end of “the Veligent” because there is too much that would be difficult to explain… but then again, it might be more interesting that way.
Kade seems to be stuck with another ( illegal) providence jar. I guess Lark stashed them around. Providence jars can lead to trouble: http://windstoneeditions.com/veligent-page-82
I posted this page on Deviant art without the “the end” thing… I run a new comic page past you guys first and fix green faces, spelling, punctuation and anything else that seems confusing before I post it there. Yeah, “The end” seemed a little too abrupt. http://reptangle.deviantart.com/art/The-Veligent-Page-125-543890075
Wow, that is an abrupt ending! Is Kade holding a happenstance jar? (No more trouble – hah!)
He is holding one of Lark’s many providence jars he stashed around.
I’ll add one more page to drift off gently after this one.
We patiently await you and your Muse’s wise decision.
I have loved every panel and look forward to more on day.Thank you for sharing and all of your hard work.
Oops – I should have gone back and checked the terminology!
Speaking only for myself, I would rather find out what happens next. Is the remainder of the story about as long as this section or is there a lot more?
Something I’ve been wondering … Did Lark know that something is wrong with Serence? What is/was he doing about it?
Young people often write very long, very complicated plots, because you don’t know any better. I have been writing this since I was in Jr. High school, so It is a really long, really complicated story. I’ll need to edit it severely if I ever hope to get the whole thing done.
There’s probably several more books this length at least, (I have trouble judging the number of pages). This story , The Veligent”,went to way more pages than I expected.
I originally hadn’t intended to post more than this one story here on the Windstone website. I can’t leave it with all these loose threads dangling…but as the story continues it gets a bit more adult. I’m not sure it is appropriate for this website!
It is a quandary.
Ayonah and Lark know something is wrong, but what??
Yes, we never did learn about Serence and his girlfriend … Post on deviantart instead? I think everybody can see the pages on DA even if some people can’t comment on them.
maybe… I am thinking about how to do this.
This felt really abrupt to me too…I was half expecting him to wake up in the dungeon on the last panel, not the end of the story! 🙂
Anything you are willing to share is great by me!
Do you plan to color the older pages of this to match at some point?
The point is here that Kade obviously has been restored to his esteemed position as Field Veligent, and is being fawned on by his buds.The King has sent his butler, Clovis, with some fresh food, instead of the crap they usually get to eat, so the King is maybe feeling a bit guilty about being an ass …
I am thinking about how to add a page to this… to make it less abrupt, and add more ‘splaination.
I am trying to add color to the previous black and white pages, (it’s not easy! -but maybe I’ll get better at it as I go along ) I had been dithering about whether or not to color the black and white pages, but I’ve decided the difference in the page appearance is a distraction. It has no significance in the story, it just happened to get plopped out that way.
(In the Wizard of Oz, the switch from black and white to color had significance!)
As a reader repeatedly surprised and delighted — as well as occasionally confused — with the beauty and imagination of your world, my request would be for you to continue the story. Currently I’m rather invested in current goings-on, after all, rather than the prequel: I want to know what’s up with the demons, who the actual enemy is, what’s wrong with Serence, how Kade will grow into his new job as diplomat…
I’ve got this emotional mix of ‘aaargh, don’t stop! moremoremore!’ and ‘wow, thank you SO much for that amazing story!’ in my head right now. 😉
In the most wonderful way, you’ve made me *care* about your story! Consequently I’d rather learn more while puzzling fascinating and difficult things out, than have it stop here. I do want you to do what works best for you, but I hope you don’t mind my also sharing how your story made me feel.
I would prefer to continue this story from here, but I don’t really know how to do it without tons of flashbacks to explain things… for some reason flashbacks stuck in a story always bother me . I managed to pull one off with the hatching poad(tm) story , but too many would be too many. Hmmm… I need to think…
I didn’t expect to run into this problem when I decided to post this story!!
Kade can’t tell them stories about his past, because he isn’t supposed to let on he is Serence’s brother, so he can’t be the narrator…dang, I’ve painted myself into a corner.
I don’t know how feasible it would be, but couldn’t Lady Podgerell (Podge) be a narrator? She could tell the a favorite guard, the Demon Knight, some of the other critters, or a mix of the above facts and stories she decided they needed to know in order to help. Like everyone else I am hoping that we will learn more about this fascinating world and the characters we’ve learned to love. Also, please do post where it can be purchased when you finally do publish it in book form!
One simple question – the small drawing of Podge that announces the page – where did it come from? I can’t seem to find it anywhere on the page?
Thank you for all that you create and share with us!!!
Problem is, Podge doesn’t talk that much. She can communicate with people who understand poot-speak… but that’s about it. She also wasn’t around in this world when most background stuff happened.
I sometimes make new drawings, or use art that I had done but ended up not using on the page, for the teaser.
Well, what about an omnipresent narrator that’s really part of the story: Ayonah? Hope I spelled that right… 🙂
Having an semi-omniscient character like Ayonah be the narrator in a story won’t work-, since he’d know most things that are about to unfold, and wouldn’t know what he doesn’t know, which is also part of the story..
…hmmm
Oh, and if you are occasionally confused by something ,let me know! I can’t tell what makes sense and what doesn’t from here. Maybe I can make things less confusing (unless the confusion was intentional)
I wasn’t thinking of her talking, exactly…more like transferring the knowledge directly, maybe like a directed dream. I guess I just assumed that her bond with Cade(?) was such that she knows everything he knows, if she bothers to think about it. As if she could step down to that level of information when the need arose. I also thought that she might be able to draw on information from people she had healed. I hope you find an answer that fits your world.
Again thank you for sharing it with us!
Marilyn
She does have a intuative psychic connection with Kade and sometimes other people, in that she can quickly size up who’s ok and who’s not. ( Podge seems to like Captain Pol… odd)
(…and she always goes “PT!” at Serence. That doesn’t translate exactly, but it sounds like a dismissive put-down)
After poking around in someone’s vel, both the Veligent and poad will have a lot more insight into what other people are like, but can’t read their minds.
I’m still thinking about how to do this.
I second third and forth this. BTW, what exactly is in a providence jar?
Love the story, though the ending was too abrupt in my opinion but then that’s just my opinion.
You’re right about too many Flashbacks slowing up and confusing a story, but, unfortunately you
do need to reveal some of the boys background for the story to keep on going.
Not a info dump – those don’t work so well – but a telling of tales.
I know you’ve said neither Podge or Ayonah would be a good choice for a narrator and Kade can’t do it; but how about Lark?
He seems, from what I can tell, old enough to have known Serrence and Kade as boys.
He could come to camp for several reasons. Collect his personal stuff (before Kade messes it up),
Check to see how Kade is doing (If he’s managed to get himself strangled by Serrence yet) ,
and to check on Serrence to see if anything has changed.
The girls would LOVE to see him back in camp even if only for a short time and he might use the tales
to point Kade in the direction he thinks he maybe should look for the trouble with Serrence.
Anyway those are just my 2 cents or would it be 10 cents with inflation, worth.
Mondays are gonna be a whole lot duller now without a page to look forward to. 🙁
Blue Mountain Cat
I think I’ve got a way to do it.
Yay! Was just checking in to nostalgically re-read a bit — what a lovely surprise to discover you’ve got a plan on how to continue! Looking forward to your solution with great antici….PAtion! 🙂
I’m not really sure. It seems to be a fluffy, chewy, pink fluid -that isn’t affected by gravity. It is an etherian material that you can enjoy in almost any way you want: roll in it, pour it on each other, dump it in your bath water, rub it in your hair, breathe it, drink it, eat it like cotton candy… It is in all states of matter at once. It is usually referred to as “pink sparkle juice”. Providence jars never run dry.
I thinking about the Rocky horror picture show just now… AND YOU SAID THAT! AAAHH
😀 <== very unrepentant grin!
Soooo… if it’s not too excitable-sounding of me: what should we be looking for, and where, and when, regarding your story’s continuation? 😉
sheesh, I wish I knew.
I am taking a break from posting pages for awhile, to think about it.
I think I have a plan, but it will require some writing that I haven’t done yet! The entire story is “written” but I didn’t plan on continuing it from the end of “The Veligent”.
OK! Well, in that case I guess I’ll just check back here periodically. I’m a HUGE fan of your work, and I really love the dramatic swoops and swirls of your imagination. Thanks for sharing! 🙂