oops… forgot General Ramsall’s cheek scratches in the lower panels …Gad,I always miss something!
and I am not sure why his pillow turned lime green… I kinda like it though.
*edit* Ok now I added cheek scratches and a few other details, still need to figure out why the right hand edge got cut off.
-and Serence’s leg looks too big…
What, no misspellings?? I didn’t even spell check this.
** edit again** Ok. I fixed everything once more. Click “refresh” if you are visiting this page again.
-and now I fixed it so the edge isn’t cut off. sheesh.
The Veligent – page 92
I’m guessing that the purple light on the general’s jaw and neck in panel two is deliberate – maybe associated with the wisterian tracking (whatever that is). The lime green pillow looks very snazzy, even if it was unintentional. 🙂
Yeah, wisteria, whatever that is, is a pretty, light lavender. It is starting to spread. The limbrane will get it off. Whatever that is.
I didn’t see any misspellings, allowing for the usual assumptions that “i” is where it belongs in several words and that the medical terms are correct.
Oops! In the last panel – “Captain”, not “Captian”.
Some of the punctuation looks a bit random, particularly “high ranking spectators – doing nothing, would be so kind …”
I would suggest either “high ranking spectators doing nothing would be so kind …” (no dash or comma), or “high ranking spectators – doing nothing – would be so kind …” Or did you mean high ranking spectators-doing-nothing?
Which reminds me, Kade doesn’t qualify as high ranking by either birth or job?
“high ranking spectators doing nothing would be so kind …” (no dash or comma), or “high ranking spectators – doing nothing – would be so kind …” Or did you mean high ranking spectators-doing-nothing?”
This whole sentence is a disaster. I will re-write it.
Ha! ok, I will fix the misspelling. It seemed odd that I had gotten it all right.
Oh yeah, Kade is probably going to be covered in wisteria by the end, but since he didn’t get it embedded in a bite, he can get it off fairly easily, if he gets it in time. Its kinda like poison oak, but selective and very visible.
I love watching him go from goofball to serious doctor in no time flat!
I absolutely love how Podge hands him his glasses! LOL 🙂
And the general’s tiny-voiced remarks are wonderful.
The interesting question is how Podge got from Pol’s hands (last panel on page 91) to Kade’s shoulder.
She jumped. I had a panel of her jumping, but decided it wasn’t that important to show. This has been a crash course in learning to edit.