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Original Poem – Zirkallian

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    This is a original Poem I wrote, and I’ve been painting a accompanying picture for it for years now, off and on. I’m just wanting some feed back on it, please don’t use my poem without my permission.

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    Zirkallion

    There was a dragon in my dream,
    Even now, I see him clear,
    His hide a glittery, glorious gleam,
    That wasn’t pierced by any spear

    Instead of scales he bore jewels
    Emeralds, sapphires, rubies and more.
    As if crafted by the finest tools
    On wings of diamonds did he soar.

    Glorious color and shining hue
    Fangs of diamond, eyes of pearl,
    Hiding deep, seen by few
    In mystery and secrets does he swirl

    In my dreams this dragon stays,
    Safe from prying eyes
    Like a pile of treasure he lays
    and from my pen his image flies

    #868827

    Bravo!

    (That’s coming from an English major! We are a dime a dozen, but sometimes feared/respected for our brandishing of red pens.)

    😉

    #868828

    Thanks XD I’m not a English major or anything, I just write and illustrate short stories and children’s books. Mostly for the illustrating, and making the story to fit the picture I come up with =)

    I’m glad you like it ^^ I plan to do a picture to go with this, but i’m having problems getting gem scales done XD;

    #870850
    Robin
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      Very good. Very visual.

      #870867

      Very well written…….great job

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