Titles?

[twindragonsmum]

I always have problems coming up with titles for what I’ve written… Some help please? Assignment was using non-sencical forms of poetry write a piece that evokes an emmotional state. In other words, don’t just rhyme for no reason, make it expressive emmotionally. Here’s my effort.

I gave you a kiss
You gave me the stars
on a side trip out somewhere
past Mars.

Where the sky was all red,
lots of dust up ahead
and we kept all our dreams in
big jars.

But, who knew that you’d do
the thing that you did that
put us on paths full of fears?

Now the dreams are all gone
they’ve fled with the dawn
and the stars are just echoes
of tears.

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[Adaneth]

Nice work on that poem! I prefer simple titles and I think ‘Dust’ might work nicely, because it evokes both the red dust of Mars and the ‘ashes to ashes dust to dust’ phrase, which is what becomes of those bright dreams at the beginning of the poem.

My two cents, anyway. 🙂

[twindragonsmum]

thankies Adaneth! I think it suits nicely

twindragonsmum 🙂

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[Brandy]

Very Eloquent Poem TDM. Certainly expresses where you are at emotionally and shows your dismay and frusteration/fear!

[twindragonsmum]

Thankies Branzy! I like to write, I just have difficulty sharing it… any tips are helpful and one day I hope to be published like several other folk here on the forums 🙂

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